tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8355052.post5940979958016342418..comments2024-03-17T10:13:20.234-04:00Comments on Common Denominator: Paul Novel Excerpt: Priscilla Expulsion from RomeKen Schenckhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09745548537303356655noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8355052.post-77228551889966685242009-03-04T18:47:00.000-05:002009-03-04T18:47:00.000-05:00Yes, I know what you're saying. I had started a P...Yes, I know what you're saying. I had started a Paul novel in the first person a few years back that was much more vivid. For good or ill, I'm spitting out the first draft of this one in the third person, using the letters as the skeleton, which impacts the style too.Ken Schenckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09745548537303356655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8355052.post-84407507747268646642009-03-04T15:13:00.000-05:002009-03-04T15:13:00.000-05:00What ! me sane - not a chance! Passionate only. In...What ! me sane - not a chance! Passionate only. In need of direction and filled with risk. But alive.Bob MacDonaldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11335631079939764763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8355052.post-80820658827170891802009-03-04T15:11:00.000-05:002009-03-04T15:11:00.000-05:00OK - do I like it? The rule is this from I think i...OK - do I like it? The rule is this from I think it is Bird by Bord by Anne Lamont - get it down, clean it up. My criticism of this as story is that it is all narrative. You are telling us rather than showing us. You need characters, plot, action, page turning, unknowns, and story.<BR/><BR/>Do it. I've been at it for 16 years and I have one tiny 10 page book published. Most of the rest is compost. But there is one small flower. (Maybe I am just slow).Bob MacDonaldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11335631079939764763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8355052.post-15420225043425108852009-03-04T15:08:00.000-05:002009-03-04T15:08:00.000-05:00Bob, I guess I had not put two and two together th...Bob, I guess I had not put two and two together that you were doing something similar! Obviously my warped and twisted imagination is quite different from sane people such as yourself!Ken Schenckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09745548537303356655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8355052.post-37946712268569965182009-03-04T15:02:00.000-05:002009-03-04T15:02:00.000-05:00OK I have reworked over the past three weeks a pie...OK I have reworked over the past three weeks a piece I wrote about 7 years ago. You can see it <A HREF="http://stenagmois.blogspot.com/2009/02/consolation-of-israel.html" REL="nofollow">here</A>. Now I will read your post.Bob MacDonaldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11335631079939764763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8355052.post-58236460037261073362009-03-04T14:43:00.000-05:002009-03-04T14:43:00.000-05:00I had better not read this till I finish editing m...I had better not read this till I finish editing my old section on Prisca! I find myself finally purging the glut of words.Bob MacDonaldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11335631079939764763noreply@blogger.com